Persuasive genre		Score 1-5
Audience	The writer’s capacity to orient, engage and persuade the reader	3
Text structure	The organisation of the structural components of a persuasive text (introduction, body and conclusion) into an appropriate and effective text structure	3
Ideas	The selection, relevance and elaboration of ideas for a persuasive argument	4
Persuasive devices	The use of a range of persuasive devices to enhance the writer’s position and persuade the reader	1
Vocabulary	The range and precision of contextually appropriate language choices	2
Cohesion	The control of multiple threads and relationships across the text, achieved through the use of grammatical elements (referring words, text connectives, conjunctions) and lexical elements (substitutions, repetitions, word associations)	3
Paragraphing	The segmenting of text into paragraphs that assists the reader to follow the line of argument	4
Sentence structure	The production of grammatically correct, structurally sound and meaningful sentences	4
Punctuation	The use of correct and appropriate punctuation to aid the reading of the text	4
Spelling	The accuracy of spelling and the difficulty of the words used	4
TOTAL		32    /50

Comment:

I thought that Tom had an interesting and persuasive piece of writing that described the topic very well. Overall it was a great and I hope in the future he continues with this.